Floating
Waves lap
Warm summer breezes
Creates illusions of calm
Drifting
Sun rays tingle skin
Haze distorts sight
Muffled sounds protects thoughts
From frantic search
For life.
I really enjoyed this. I loved the way it started off feeling like a calm summer’s day, floating in the sea and then became more serious. I thought the change of tone was very clever and quite unexpected – I reread it several times #Prose4T
Superbly written. It says so much in so few lines – and I love how it is formed too. Brilliant stuff Becky. Thank you for linking to Prose for Thought x
I really enjoyed this. I loved the way it started off feeling like a calm summer’s day, floating in the sea and then became more serious. I thought the change of tone was very clever and quite unexpected – I reread it several times #Prose4T
Thank you x
Yes, I agree with ‘baby anon’ I felt the shift in the poem to a slightly darker side. Very clever and well written Becky.
Mainy – myrealfairy
#prose4t
Thank you x
Superbly written. It says so much in so few lines – and I love how it is formed too. Brilliant stuff Becky. Thank you for linking to Prose for Thought x